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Give me feedback on my first poem in Danish
Hi, I don't know if this is the right place to post this, but...one of the ways I like to practice a new language is to write poetry. Since grammar rules get bent all the time in poetry, it makes me feel a little easier about expressing myself. Anyway, I just started learning Danish and wrote this...hoping some native Danish speakers will give me some feedback on word choice, structure, etc. Here's the poem:

Skjule

Monsteret sover
Træde let
Ikke grine højlydt (ikke grine på alle)
Det vil høre dig

Hvis du finder glæde
Eller et hjem
Hvis du glemmer udyret (for selv et øjeblik)
Det vil find dig

Monster forråder
Det er uretfærdig
Det er ufølsom (hvad ville det føles)
Den er død

Monsteret sov
Det er vågen nu
Ikke synge højlydt (ikke synge på alle)
Det vil finde dig

Language pair: English; Danish
Rowan
March 25, 2014

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